Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People benefit more from traveling in their own country than from traveling to foreign countries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is an undeniable fact that traveling has the paramount benefits in the life of each person. Some people may hold the view that traveling is more beneficial when individuals travel in their own country. On the other hand, some may have an opposite point of view and believe that visiting in the foreign countries could contribute to acquire more experinces and also be familiar with different cultures. I, personally, can not be disagree with the second opinion and I think that traveling to differenet countries has more advantages.
The first reason playing a major role is that most of the life experiences can be achieved by traveling to unknown countries. It goes without saying that there are numerous intact areas in all around the world ,which could bring precious experiences to adventurers. For example, last year a group of mountain climbers could reach the unkown peak in Himalaya, which is reported as one of the big achievements in the last decads. According to these athletes there was significant sign on exotic fossils, which has not been seen anywhere else. As you can see, this kind of achievements lies at the root of visiting other countries. If these climbers repeat their climbing in their own countries, with the same mountains and areas, these precious relics will not be found.
Another rational to endorse my point of view is that people will be acquintances with various cultures and cousins when they travel to foreign countries. It is due to the fact that each community has their own culture, food, religeous and way of thinking. A noteworthy statistics ,which are revealed by a social study, show that people ,who have passionate to travel to different countries, have more satisfaction in their own life. It may be attributed to this matter that learning about other cultures and their attitudes toward life generate a sense of pleasure in people.
To put it in a nutshell, all the reasons mentioned above leads us to the conclousion that traveling to various countries will produce benefits which traveling to own country will not. Why can ignore the achievments like experiences and cultures stem from by traveling abroud.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, i think, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1815.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 360.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04166666667 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72079185777 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.527777777778 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 548.1 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.1157416307 48.9658058833 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.4375 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4375 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.307159938141 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0985598242956 0.076458572812 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710633935669 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195624035578 0.150856017488 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623807505912 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.25 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.24 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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