Due to so many young people dropping out from schools, the rate of unemployment is increasing and it affects our society in different ways. In your opinion, how can this situation be improved?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In today’s society, the percentage of unemployed people rises on an unprecedented scale, wreaking havoc on the community. This phenomenon could be attributed to the fact that the number of school dropouts witnessed a significant increase. This essay will shed some light on the reasons why such a trend is caused and propose several measures to untangle it.
One of the driving forces behind this worrying trend would stem from the improper upbringing of parents. Having said that, a multitude of parents seem to immerse themselves into an overwhelming workload, which leads to the ignorance of their child’s social and school life. Consequently, children disregard the vitality of education and befriend other bad teenagers. Another culprit associated with such an issue would be associated with poverty. Owing to globalization, the gap between the rich and the poor becomes more and more unbridgeable. This inevitably means that the number of school dropouts show no signs of abating because they have to seek jobs to make ends meet.
In order to mitigate such disturbing problems, there are a number of solutions that can be offered. First and foremost, parents’ education would be of paramount importance in combating the issue. That is to say, parents should offer their children better supervision and educational orientation so that they could grasp how pivotal education is in their later life and career. A further step should be conducted by the government who plays an influential role in bolstering the education of the country. To be more specific, an annual amount of government should be allocated to grant incentive scholarships to support such students dropping out from schools.
In conclusion, factors stemming from parental negligence and poverty have led to the acceleration of unemployment rate in the society. Yet, if governments and individuals share a collective responsibility, this alarming trend would no longer be the case.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, so, in conclusion, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1661.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37540453074 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99748011596 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.611650485437 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.2717802866 49.4020404114 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 103.8125 106.682146367 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3125 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.9375 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133875246367 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.041535943843 0.084324248473 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0264560319361 0.0667982634062 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829845161832 0.151304729494 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0177232778898 0.056905535591 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.54 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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