Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit people’s sugar consumption, while others think that it is an individual’s responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is thought by some that the government ought to be responsible for the limitation of sugar consumption while others argue that people should control by themselves how much sugar they eat as eating sugar in big amounts is harmful for health. In my opinion, while it is beneficial for governments when its citizens are healthy, I consider that people should be responsible for their health.
On the one hand, according to some governments should control the average consumption of sugar because it has positive long-term effect. This is because when people do not eat a lot of sugar they have good health and their life expectancy is prolonged. Furthermore, healthy people work and study more and they easily became richer. Consequently, healthy and rich people start their own business and make huge contribution to the country. Another point to consider is that when whole society have good health the government spend less money on treatment and medicine.
On the other hand, It is commonly believed that people should limit the average consumption of sugar as they ought to care about their health and I agree. When people have good health, their life expectancy is prolonged. In addition, when people are healthy they have healthy and happy families, they can work and take care about their children. For example, people with good health do not need to spend their money and time for treatment instead of this they can spent money on travelling or different positive things.
In conclusion, although it is beneficial for the governments when it control sugar consumption as it helps to people to be healthy, I believe that people should take care about their health and limit sugar consumption.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 464, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'spend'
Suggestion: spend
... for treatment instead of this they can spent money on travelling or different positi...
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Line 4, column 70, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'controls'?
Suggestion: controls
... beneficial for the governments when it control sugar consumption as it helps to people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1423.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 283.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.02826855124 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63169053139 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 124.0 176.041082164 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.43816254417 0.561755894193 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 425.7 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.7987616981 49.4020404114 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.583333333 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.369291348453 0.244688304435 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.157265990499 0.084324248473 187% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134551716965 0.0667982634062 201% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27988253602 0.151304729494 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.117429408155 0.056905535591 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.19 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.18 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 78.4519038076 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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