Education for young people is important in many countries. However, some people think that the government should spend more money on education in adult populations who cannot read and write.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nowadays, in many nations, children are the primary focus in education system which there are some arguments against this which encourage government to pay more attention to illiterate adult citizen. I agree to the certain extent that the first priority should be people who can not read and write, however there are also some definite issues to consider which will be further discussed in this essay.
Illiterate adults should received more attention compared to young people for many reasons. First and foremost, the literate is one of the most important basic skill in our daily life. Since writing is a part of every thing including both formal and informal communication, they might be unemployed persons with poor financial positions and may conduct the crime or any forms of social problem to survive. Moreover, the increasing in ability in reading and writing among adults qualify them to be skill labor enhancing the country’s economic progress. This is because it increases the workforce in industry sector enhancing in the country’s income. Also, this could lead to a decrease in unemployment rate of the nation.
On the other hand, the young people might be more important to invest in their education. For one thing, the country’s future development mainly depend on the ideas from young generation. Now that there are many disruptions among the rapid change of the world, the new ideas from young people are required for adaptation in this situation. Consequently, the literate skill is only a foundation of further development in other skills seeing that most of lessons and knowledges have to be learned by reading and writing. Another point is that spend more money in young population is a long term investment with a gradually growth in outcome over their age. Investment in an early age leading to the ability to apply for some jobs since their juvenile age. For example, they will qualify to be blue-collar workers in many parts of industry sectors such as convenience stores, supermarket which these skills can be further developed in the rest of their life.
In conclusion, there are both benefits and drawbacks from investment in the education system for these groups of population. However, in my opinion, I encourage the government to support in adult people as the first priority as it is an urgent circumstance to turn them to be employabled persons for ability to raise themselves which could lead to a reduction in the country’s burdens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'peopled'?
Suggestion: peopled
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Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the lessons') or simply say ''most lessons''.
Suggestion: most of the lessons; most lessons
...development in other skills seeing that most of lessons and knowledges have to be learned by re...
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Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('growth') instead of another adjective.
...pulation is a long term investment with a gradually growth in outcome over their age. Investment i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, such as, for one thing, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 41.998997996 152% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 8.3376753507 276% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1615.20841683 129% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13267813268 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81905459367 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 176.041082164 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5085995086 0.561755894193 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 6.0 2.52805611222 237% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.8980180657 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.882352941 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9411764706 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.41176470588 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.264169719142 0.244688304435 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0832717510109 0.084324248473 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690442677375 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163569192278 0.151304729494 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.039256271549 0.056905535591 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.77 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 78.4519038076 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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