Ensuring that children have regular physical exercise should be the responsibility of parents and therefore schools should not waste valuable school time having sports lessons as part of the curriculum. To what extent do you agree?
In the growing world everything is based on technology,therefore the childrensare becoming more sedentary and obese thats not good for their future and have negative effacts in future. some people advocating that parents are responsible for their chidren's physical health instead of wasting school hours on it. In this essay I will dicuss about the benefits and consequences of this view,however, in my view I am completely disagree with this.
Certainly, what we observe at home we learn that in our life, so in recent decade use of mobile phone increasing tremendously so that the new generation also interested in this and in tv also and parents thay are busy in office work,household work and other activity they also want to relax by giving the phone to children instead of playing with them, even some children are addicted to tv and mobile phones so parents are first teacher in our life they have to play with children and teaching them exercises other sports activities.
Secondly, schools are second home for children, there should be some sports class and other physical activity after a long study hour it will relax their mind and enhance the learning, what they learn in school they will perform at home and it will deter the excessive use of other things which effacting theur body so,In my opinion, there is need for a change in the school curriculum as well as in parents thinking toward physical activity.
In conclusion, parents should have to aware about health of their children and start teaching them fitness and physical training but there is a requirement for a special trainer for that school also have to edit their curriculum with sports.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, even so, in conclusion, as well as, in my opinion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1395.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96441281139 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70775713156 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.544483985765 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 16.0721442886 37% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 20.2975951904 227% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 156.708505052 49.4020404114 317% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 232.5 106.682146367 218% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 46.8333333333 20.7667163134 226% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.8333333333 7.06120827912 309% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.245272284404 0.244688304435 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121474175416 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775860607032 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155045975125 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054948935067 0.056905535591 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.3 13.0946893788 193% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.25 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 20.1 11.3001002004 178% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.38 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 10.1190380762 202% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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