Evaluate a public place. Suggest how it could be made more appealing.
The Old Quarter - a huge change for the stability
Old Quarter is a large historical area which tourists cannot skip when visiting Hanoi. It has 36 streets which have been told many folk poems and tales since thousands years ago. However, the place has become extremely chaotic and polluted area which has been brought about by the population increase and the local government’s irresponsibility. This essay will describe the Old Quarter features, and according to that, the author will also give some recommendations to the city authorities that they can apply to tackle these issues.
First and foremost, the Old Quarter is a crucial zone of Hanoi city which is located at the heart of the city where contains a collection of ancient buildings and houses. The area is also the national political and public administration center of Vietnam. That is the reason which explains why it has a great number of modern and luxurious architectures. They include the governmental offices and international hotels, such as, National Convention Center and Hilton or Melia hotel. Additionally, crowded streets, cramped roads, and small pavements are one of the stand out components which created the unique features of the Old Quarter, for instance, Hang Ma street is a distinctive picture which represents the tradition of Hanoi’s 36 streets.
Equally important, the Old Quarter has the lakeside road system which is closed for walking in the weekend, thereupon, tourists and local people who are alike have been attracted to come there for enjoying “Hanoi’s spirit”. The majority of roads and streets are small and narrow, thus, there is not enough space for pedestrians. Sadly, it is not easy to find support when you are travelling here because the lack of information providing points in this central zone of the capital. Besides this disappointment, the citizens and visitors have been suffered terribly by the dirt and pollution which are owing to the city authorities’ poor management on protecting the environment and current traffic state. Plus the immense increasing in number of cars, the situation has become increasingly severe in recent years. Clearly, this area need to be reformed and changed to improve and conserve its historical values, actually, that is not only in foreign tourists’ assessment, but also in local people’s eyes.
Accordingly, there are some solution which can help the city address the issues aforementioned. Firstly, the government should quickly improve the traffic quality by encouraging the development of the public transportation system surrounding the area, such as metro or buses. Moreover, prohibiting private motorbikes and cars should be cautiously scrutinized to limit them from entering the city center following a daily schedule. Secondly, designing and building more new “Hanoi booths” which will provide information for foreigners and domestic tourists. Furthermore, these will promote the tourism service at the capital’s heart areas. One more thing, the government has to prepare drastically for expanding Old Quarter’s pavements as the purpose of enhancing the city’s sightseeing. The procedure might not easy to operate, but it is critical to the city’s quantum lead, and by virtue of this, the government has to satisfy short term benefits before they can completely overcome these problems.
In conclusion, the Old Quarter is playing a great role in the development of Vietnam’s capital city where the changing reflection of the country has been represented. Unfortunately, the abundance of cultural, political and economic values of the nation which are subsisting in and around this area are in emergency on account of the pollution, traffic jam and lack of space. Accordingly, managing the transportation and private vehicles is necessary to increase the air and traffic quality. Furthermore, Hanoi’s city council should consider the ideas which are expanding the pavement systems and providing more support points to help maintain all these wonderful national heritages. All these solutions will be the key factor to the stability of the national capital.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, actually, also, besides, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 13.1623246493 228% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 10.4138276553 317% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 22.0 7.30460921844 301% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 41.998997996 148% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 8.3376753507 312% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3550.0 1615.20841683 220% => Less number of characters wanted.
No of words: 645.0 315.596192385 204% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.50387596899 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.03952876749 4.20363070211 120% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.154718247 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 338.0 176.041082164 192% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.524031007752 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 1092.6 506.74238477 216% => syllable counts are too long.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 15.0 2.52805611222 593% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.5098243323 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.481481481 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8888888889 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 3.4128256513 264% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0418829215219 0.244688304435 17% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0139765870703 0.084324248473 17% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0203409281945 0.0667982634062 30% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0222945476289 0.151304729494 15% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0170022553758 0.056905535591 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 13.0946893788 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.92 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.6 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 197.0 78.4519038076 251% => Less difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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