Everyone should stay at school until they are 18. Do you agree or disagree?

Essay topics:

Everyone should stay at school until they are 18. Do you agree or disagree?

The argument over the necessity of going to schools until the age of eighteen has been ongoing for years. Some people reckon that education at schools are radical and crucial for everyone before being independent with their own life, while others believe that schools contain inessentialities, which can destroy creation and change individuals into passiveness. From my point of view, everybody need to be well-educated and acquire knowledge at schools, especially children.
To begin with, before reaching the age of eighteen, youngsters are naive, inexperienced and incline to be perplexed when it comes to facing with troubles, hardships or ups and downs of life. Therefore, suitable educational curricula and upbringing at schools are invented to guide, teach as well as prepare for them significant skills and good behaviors. Secondly, for many, as we are living in the age of dominant technological innovations, lots of hi-tech machines and artificial intelligences are gruadually substituting humans in most of works. Little by little, unemployment of workers would be increase in the future, due to the convenience and modern of machines.As a results, we have to prove that human beings cannot be replaced easily. Thus, kids could be motivated to bring positive consequences to their countries by broadening their horizons and developing themselves with the training of teachers, as"children are the bright future".
Thirdly, as eighteen is an ideal age to set up dreams and follow passions, school are directly helping teenagers to define what they are deeply into through captivating activities, lessons and clubs. This is important for them in order not to be unknown, apprehensive or anxious about the careers they want to work when being mature enough. Finally, studying at school is contributing to the anti-illiteracy campaign, which can bring success for children, and help their countries to escape from poor.
In summarize, I have a viewpoint that each person must stay at school before the age of eighteen, as they will be offered countless benefits and advantages for their solid future.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, thus, well, while, as a result, as well as, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1792.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.41389728097 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.08427699447 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634441087613 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 545.4 506.74238477 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.7501704155 49.4020404114 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.333333333 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5833333333 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132856647089 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0521551901433 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0459474368093 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998463991335 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0464938523601 0.056905535591 82% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 50.2224549098 88% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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