Extreme sports such as sky diving and skiing are very dangerous and should be banned.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
There is no doubt that high risk sports such as paragliding or sliding on skis down the slopes are hazardous. Therefore, some people claim that this kind of sports should be restricted. This essay disagrees with this argument and will discuss a reasonable opinion about why this type of sport should not dissapear.
To begin with, all kinds of adventure sports such as scuba diving, snowboarding or kitesurfing may promote people to travel to exotic places. It is common to see risky sports being offered as a leisure activity by travel agencies, for the reason that people tend to be attracted by a new exciting activity. Therefore, traveling is a great opportunity to accomplish their wishes despite the fact that might represent a risk for the integrity of themselves. For example, visiting Hawaii is a nice occasion to practice surf since the waves conditions are perfect for water sports, however one should be aware of sharks surrounding the area. Nevertheless, I believe that the level of excitement that a person can reach trying this kind of sports overcome/outweigh any possible harm.
On the other hand, it is clear that the potential harm of this kind of activity is extremely low. The largest number of people who practice extreme sports do not experience any major damage, at least they suffer from small bruises. To illustrate this, recent research has demonstrated that parachuting is safer than cycling and running. Furthermore, practicing adventure sports may enhance people’s mental health. Those who practice that kind of sports tend to be more happy and optimistic on a daily basis. This is because they are always thinking about the next time they will practice thus their brain keeps enthusiastic. It has been proven that playing risky sports releases endorphins such as adrenaline that provoke a feeling of satisfaction and accomplishment.
To conclude, although extreme sports may represent a potential hazard to humans, in my opinion this sort of activity could encourage people to travel to tourist places and thus discover new experiences. Regardless of the risk they may represent, they should not be restricted owing to the fact that the proven harm is very little, in fact they enhance mental health.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, at least, for example, in fact, kind of, no doubt, sort of, such as, in my opinion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1887.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 365.0 315.596192385 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1698630137 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82682642639 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.561643835616 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 568.8 506.74238477 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2363048163 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.0 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4705882353 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4705882353 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.202297143271 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0670419052332 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388530244086 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132629396736 0.151304729494 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483181010946 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 78.4519038076 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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