Failure is proof that the desire wasn t strong enough To what extent do you agree with this statement

Many people bolster that failure is an evidence of the lack of good will. I strongly disagree with this viewpoint. My further explanation is elaborated in ensuing paragraphs.

The foremost reason of my disagreement is that the success is not only depends on a strong desire; many factors play vital role on personals' loss or win. Other parameters, such as financial problems, less use of technology, limited equipments are affect the success story of individuals. Cricket team of Afghanistan, for example, despite having a good skills and motivation towards the sport, lack of funding and insufficient infrastructure, national players have not able to won a world cup for the country yet.

Apart from other parameters, many success needs time to arrive before coping with the failures. Failure should be considered as a next step towards the victory. Such as, famous scientist Thomas Alva Edison did 1000 wrong experiments before inventing the light bulb. He admitted that if I was not failed, I would never invented such an equipment.

On the contarary, brighter side of the given argument cannot be ignored. People who had less desired to their goals are less work oriented and less motivated to acomplish the task. Study in American school is found that, the students who wanted to achieve first rank in the school, work hard compared to those who had not any strong goal.

In conclusion, it can be eventually commented that high will is not a prime factor for loss, other external factors also responsible. While many think lack of motivation is the only reason of failure, I believed that other parameters must be considered.

Votes
Average: 4.1 (3 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'personals'' or 'personal's'?
Suggestion: personals'; personal's
...desire; many factors play vital role on personals loss or win. Other parameters, such as ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ry yet. Apart from other parameters, many success needs time to arrive before cop...
^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun success seems to be countable; consider using: 'many successes'.
Suggestion: many successes
...ry yet. Apart from other parameters, many success needs time to arrive before coping with...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'equipment'.
Suggestion: equipment
...not failed, I would never invented such an equipment. On the contarary, brighter side of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08518518519 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76808432121 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644444444444 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0128484472 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0749325247644 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305472761557 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562953183198 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459815344774 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478853770326 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'personals'' or 'personal's'?
Suggestion: personals'; personal's
...desire; many factors play vital role on personals loss or win. Other parameters, such as ...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: MANY_FEW_UNCOUNTABLE[2]
Message: Use 'much' or 'little' with uncountable nouns.
Suggestion: much; little
...ry yet. Apart from other parameters, many success needs time to arrive before cop...
^^^^
Line 5, column 30, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun success seems to be countable; consider using: 'many successes'.
Suggestion: many successes
...ry yet. Apart from other parameters, many success needs time to arrive before coping with...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 333, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'equipment'.
Suggestion: equipment
...not failed, I would never invented such an equipment. On the contarary, brighter side of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, so, while, apart from, for example, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1373.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08518518519 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76808432121 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.644444444444 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0128484472 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5333333333 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 7.06120827912 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0749325247644 0.244688304435 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0305472761557 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0562953183198 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0459815344774 0.151304729494 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478853770326 0.056905535591 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.