Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree?
To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
It is true that film stars and music celebrities earn a lot of money and live in luxurious surrounding while some people tend towards the view point that many of them lead unhappy lives. I would have support the idea and agree with that opinion.
On the one hand there are clear argument that film starts and music celebrities earn lots of money. They have wonderful and luxurious houses and cars; lead also a comfortable and expensive life. Despite of having all of this they are unhappy. One of the main reason can be that they are too much busy with their schedule. Sometimes they have to finish their shooting within a very short time as well as music show have to prepare overnight. This means they can not give proper time to Their family. Another reason that can be privacy. Thier profession does not give them Secrecy. The media is always busy in search of information of their life. How they behave and response everything which actually bother them so lot. Sometimes this harassment of media lead them to physical and mental stress. For example britney Spears addicts with drugs and has been in clinic for many times. Celebrities are involved in relation for a certain period for example scarlet johanson has ended up her 2 nd marriage.
On the other hand there are some good example of happy,wealthy and well-known stars who can manage their work as well as maintain their family. Not only that but also they did good job as giving scholarship to help the students who have not enough condition to study. On the contrary gave donation during the time of natural calamities.
In conclusion it seems to me that happiness is correlative matter. It is not the fact that money and fame makes people unhappy; fact is how the film stars and music celebrities deals with it (money,fame)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, if, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as well as, it is true, on the contrary, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1485.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72929936306 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39145681169 2.80592935109 85% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544585987261 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 460.8 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.5594195908 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.25 106.682146367 70% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.4 7.06120827912 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.294868397803 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.075463884723 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0800468900887 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178270648626 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11056503843 0.056905535591 194% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 50.2224549098 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 11.3001002004 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.45 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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