Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree?
To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
Some people think, that the famous people are very lucky, because they have a lot of opportunities to live rich. But they also are usual humans and most of them feels themselves badly. It is possible that the unhappy life can be payment for their bucket chance. I agree with this statement because there are many causes why celebrities have the poor lives.
Firstly, people see money, useful connections and benefits only to support relation with celebrities. So famous people almost haven’t true friends even distant relatives want to use their opportunities and look for profit. Although, stars have assistants and other familiar celebrities, they feel themselves alone and often have different illness such as depression or nervous breakdown. For example, American singer, songwriter and actress Demi Lovato suffered on the polar disorder for several years.
Secondly, celebrities have a difficult stressful work which have an effect on their health. Despite of people think that money fall on heads of stars they don’t know how celebrities make the work. Notwithstanding such work doesn’t compare with loaders work, but mental job takes a lot of energy. So, concerts with loud music and every day and night shootings put pressure on the psyche and physical condition of a person. So, people face difficulties, some of them give up but others continue to spoil their health and part of them become to take drugs or drink alcohol. For example the music celebrity Avicii died by suicide in 2018 due to health problems, he had suffered stress and poor mental health, which had become due to longer tours with concerts and people's pressure.
In conclusion I can say that money and luxurious life don’t make famous people happy. As for me they just people who have a difficult job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 13.1623246493 38% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 295.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09830508475 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14434120667 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5579634962 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630508474576 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.430959962 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4375 20.7667163134 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.375 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175759096496 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591803008934 0.084324248473 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335715835633 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116786505787 0.151304729494 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0478494333262 0.056905535591 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.0946893788 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.3 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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