Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
There is a widespread belief that national and local authorities should introduce restrictions on funding provision on some forms of art such as music or theatre. Instead, priority should be given to public services. As far as I am concerned, although art is paramount importance, excessive focusing on this discipline can be disadvantageous.
On the one hand, it is true that prioritizing national budget on art may be beneficial. In terms of entertainment, music and theatre are ubiquitous forms of recreation in host of parts of the world, people tend to unwind themselves by listening to music or going to the cinema after their hard-working days. Therefore, high quality pieces of music or movies can bring sense of satisfaction and lead to a more sufficient working results. Movie theatres or music studios also bring more job opportunities for youngsters to earn a living. From the perspective of knowledge, some famous songs or dramas are likely to include the tradition of particular regions. Hence, people can have more opportunities to broaden knowledge about their culture, which gives strong senses of identity and provides a link to our roots.
On the other hand, I also put forward the argument that excessive funding provided on art by governments also brings some notable drawbacks. Firstly, in some developing countries, issues such as environment or healthcare have become serious problems, and the authorities are trying their best to mitigate this by wide range of policies. Therefore, investing chiefly on art means inadequate money can be given on dealing with those problems. Secondly, contributing on arts is not only a duty of government. Private corporations must be responsible for the development of arts in order to expand their reputation and help their culture and tradition become more viral.
In conclusion, it seems to me that although national budget should be utilised to develop numerous forms of arts, private organizations ought to allocate resources in this fields to reduce burden of government.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...izations ought to allocate resources in this fields to reduce burden of government. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1722.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 325.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.29846153846 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24591054749 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.06883552497 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.584615384615 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2115707642 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.33333333333 7.06120827912 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.176810493292 0.244688304435 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0535499515898 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0388604550236 0.0667982634062 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0970095080889 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507885392658 0.056905535591 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 78.4519038076 126% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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