Government investment in arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead.
To what extend do you agree with this statement?
Most countries invest more in arts, for example, music and theatre as they can be a tourist attraction and can be seen as a value place. Because of that, more necessary areas, such as education, environment health, hospitality, and so on, have less attention and for some countries, they have poor public services. Therefore, I totally agree if the goverment invest more in public services, where it gives more benefits to the citizens.
If most of the investment went to public services, the country would be more develop as some certain areas improve too. For example, Indonesia has poor quality of education as many cities around the country still use worn out school equipment and this country also experience an uneven education. If more money are being invest to this area, the country will be more improved as well the students, who are known to be the future generation to them. Besides education, most countries still have dreadful environment health. This area needs a lot of money so all the greens that grow naturally along the streets and other nature resources, can have great maintainence.
Nevertheless, government invest more in arts in reality, as they believe it can be a tourist attraction. If they maintain a great condition to the area, tourists can be attracted to it and it also give high contribution of revenue to the country. However, arts do not need that much investments while goverment waste so much money on this.
In conclusion, in order to have greater value in different aspects, goverment has to pay more attention and invest more in public services because people use it more in daily life than arts itself.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, well, while, as to, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.3376753507 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94964028777 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68594017496 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 151.0 176.041082164 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.543165467626 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.0519455792 49.4020404114 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.666666667 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3333333333 7.06120827912 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.210963815556 0.244688304435 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865413249135 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688502331528 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135332198542 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483542941882 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.0946893788 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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