The government’s investment in arts, music and theatre is a waste of money. Government should invest these funds in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?
It is often argue that the Government should finance public services instead of spending its budget on arts, music and theatre. Although I agree that the Government’s investment in public services play a vital role, I think that proper finding in arts sector is also pivotal for the society.
On the one hand, plans and budgets should be made in the favor of public because good plans would give some kind of relief to the people in this period of inflation. The government should utilize the expenditure in a proper way to reduce the price of basic things which are essential for the necessity of the life. Moreover, they should use the funds in the infrastructure of the country, provide quality education and better health treatment facilities to facilitate their citizens. For example, any county can live without any music concert but the absence of food and medicine would be a significant problem. Therefore, the Government should look for the betterment of their people.
On the other hand, arts and cinemas are also important as it create a source of an entertainment for the people. It provides a kind of relaxation and recreation for an individual. The government should propose some ideas for the development of modern cinemas and music and give a proper and respective place for traditional music because it is an identity and tradition of a culture. In addition, with the advancements in these entertainment places can attract a lot of tourists and can be proved as a tremendous role in the progress of a nation. For instance, London is one of the popular city in the European state which is well known for many live shows and well-renowned art galleries. Therefore an art is an important for the society and should not be neglected.
To recapitulate, though I agree that the government should allocate a large part of its budget for the needs of the society, I think that arts, music and theatre should also be financed so that people should know their traditional values and also get familiar with the old methods of an entertainment source like folk music etc.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, moreover, so, therefore, well, as for, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.3376753507 264% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1733.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 355.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88169014085 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34067318298 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83785167032 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492957746479 0.561755894193 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.4211707394 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.785714286 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3571428571 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232447269071 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0826857087337 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0799011420185 0.0667982634062 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175104718568 0.151304729494 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993371964482 0.056905535591 175% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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