Government should change the way individuals live while others believe they should choose the way themselves. Discuss these both points of view and give your opinion.

It is a highly controversial issue that whether should authorities be involved in citizens’ way of lives or people have rights to choose their lifestyles. This essay is going to discuss both sides of the issue in further detail and I will give my personal view in the conclusion.

On the one hand, there are those who maintain that on no account can the governments control the way residents live. Firstly, by determining their own lifestyles, people can get rids of anxiety and stress without the control of government bodies. Indeed, in some democratic nations, people believe that the governments serve local residents, not vice versa, therefore, if laws or regulations which are imposed by authorities to shape their locals’ lives such as what to eat, where to go or what to wear, their citizens will not satisfy with their qualities of life. Secondly, the government has no business to organize the way people want to live, as long as, their activities do not harm others. To illustrate, a man can drink alcohol or smoke, even these kinds of stuff can pose a serious threat to his health. However, after that, if he can control his actions as well as emotions to not harm other people, he can be at liberty to use these things, because he is a sole person who should take responsibility to his health, not the government.

On the other hand, other people claim that governments should have some measures to change their individuals’ way of lives. Firstly, it is obvious that in order to uphold an ordered society, the governments enact new laws as well as allocate money on education lead their locals to become law-abiding citizens who can contribute to society. In fact, owing to the rampant of crime rate because of negative lifestyles, the authority restricts their citizens’ freedom to do whatever they want so as to curb lawless behavior, because the safety of residents is high on the government’s agenda. The second reason is that via changing individuals’ lifestyles, the governments can ensure the decent living standard for their communities. The government who has a profound grasp of the tendency of the world’ development can strengthen the living income or standard for locals by encouraging them to develop modern lifestyles such as: applying technologies for works, using environmentally-friendly commodities and so on, so they can become good citizens in the global village.

In conclusion, I believe that everyone should be at liberty to do anything that they want under the limit of the governments because we cannot downplay the importance of the governments in our lifestyles’ decisions.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 40.0 24.0651302605 166% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 41.998997996 143% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2231.0 1615.20841683 138% => OK
No of words: 435.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12873563218 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.18543554379 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533333333333 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 693.9 506.74238477 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.017821012 49.4020404114 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.357142857 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0714285714 20.7667163134 150% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.5714285714 7.06120827912 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232036576849 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925864432343 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0686848256421 0.0667982634062 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155903273908 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308646395507 0.056905535591 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 13.0946893788 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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