Health experts say that obese women and women over the age of 40 should not be given free fertility treatment (IVF) because they are more likely to experience health problems.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
Professionals in the medical occupations, state that women and females in a middle-age have a health-related problem and due to this, fertility treatment (IVF) should be given to them for money. This essay disagrees with this point of view because of the human rights, declining the birth rate in different regions, and newborns can suffer from different diseases.
It is widely accepted in public, that each woman has a right to born a child and if it is possible, she should not be discriminated against because of her weight. Human rights are basic to human beings. Currently, the government making a lot of effort to promote equality. For example, United Nations conventions do not allow to have such discrimination in the public and such people doing this should be penalized.
It is certainly true that IVF is very useful for the increased number of people in different parts of the world. More and more people have struggled problems with obesity and if IVF is not for free, the population will decrease because this therapy costs a lot and most the families could not afford it. For instance, Kazakhstan is the biggest territory in Central Asia, moreover, it has an issue with the weight of women, but in total the people residing in this destination are not too much. The state started to encourage free pregnancy care and for now, the results are amazing; the population started to grow.
Another important factor is finance, and the new generation will become unhealthy which is bad for society. The reason for this is that women become more unhealthy, If pregnancy cure charges some money, she will start to find ways how to save money. They can use an unauthorized medical institution that provides such services for less pay. This can be a result of diseases and illness. A recent study shows that 51 percent who have used not official medical services born sick offspring.
In conclusion, free fertility treatment has a lot of advantages for a world population and it will be a result of a healthy generation in the future. Furthermore, women with obesity should not be discriminated just because of her big body, it is violating the rights of humans.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1810.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90514905149 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73756737991 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 176.041082164 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520325203252 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5273666539 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.470588235 106.682146367 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7058823529 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47058823529 7.06120827912 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254270102938 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747566079283 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0710875151182 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152182624846 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0743343908151 0.056905535591 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.32 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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