If a product is good and meets customer needs, then people will buy it and advertising is unnecessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is a consensus among people that if a product is good and meets customer's demands, people will purchase it without the need of commercials. Personally, although it is true that individuals can purchase products that live up to their expectations, I believe advertisements are still crucial in our daily life.
First of all, advertising is one of the key aspects of a properous economy. If commercials do not exist, many companies will suffer from a decrease in sales and profits, which would eventually affect unemployment rates and the economy. To illustrate, Coca Cola provides thousands of employment opportunities in advertising throughout its branches across different regions around the world. Moreover, if advertising is considered as unimportant, a large number of workers such as marketes, may become unemployed. As a consequence, the government will have to provide temporary financial support for those unemployed people.
Furthermore, thanks to commercials, customers can be informed of newly launched products . In other words, they are aware of the array of selections available to their demands, otherwise, they are confined to only a narrow range of products. To exemplify, recently, there has been an appearance of a new shampoo product, thanks to advertisements, people can see that product on television or on other social networking sites such as Youtube or Facebook. As a result, people will have a tendency to try that new shampoo product and decide whether it is suitable with them or not.
In conclusion, although it is conceivable that if a product meet the demand of customers, they will purchase it. However, without the involve of commercials, this can affect the unemplyment rates and individuals cannot be informed of new products.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, in other words, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1501.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.37992831541 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19105693897 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594982078853 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.1486482531 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.461538462 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4615384615 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4615384615 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225263063234 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0769259598218 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814496579383 0.0667982634062 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134397155556 0.151304729494 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0690816282451 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.92 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.