With an increasing number of people eating fast food which if eating to regularly can cause health issues some people think that the only solution is ban it completely To what extent do you agree

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With an increasing number of people eating fast food, which if eating to regularly can cause health issues, some people think that the only solution is ban it completely. To what extent do you agree?

Instant food has become a part of everyone's daily rations. Some people argue that authorities should strictly ban fast food due to diseases. I partly agree with this statement for several reasons.
Consuming fast food on a daily basis can bring various potential risks relating the health conditions. The first reason is that fast foods contain a large amount of sugary, saturated fats and salt, which are unhealthy and cause extreme obesity, diabetes, and high blood pressure. As a result, the number of obesity significantly increases, which creates an enormous burden on governments. Furthermore, instant foods also comprise a lot of additives and preservatives, so it is hard for consumers to stop eating immediately. Finally, manufacturers aim at making big profits from selling not giving attention to the quality of ingredients. Therefore, food hygiene and safety are not guaranteed after putting on the market.
Fast food can bring various harms, but I believe that government should not prohibit due for several reasons. Firstly, the food industry plays a vital role in providing jobs for people and boosting the economy. If regulations come into effect, the unemployed rate steadily increases and widely affects economic stability. Nevertheless, takeaway food is quite convenient and lets people grab something and go. Instead of banning ready food, governments should invest in more sports centers and parks to encourage to work out after eating. And they should organize educated campaigns which aim at explaining the risks of fast food and the following food pyramid.
In conclusion, I partly agree that convenience food should be restricted because it is not beneficial for health. At the same time, it is not necessary to forbid it completely because it can provoke an increase in the unemployment level.

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Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32986111111 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85743215129 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.635416666667 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 28.0731866062 49.4020404114 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 90.2941176471 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9411764706 20.7667163134 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.35294117647 7.06120827912 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274154916419 0.244688304435 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788471499847 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0433192763834 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.160729084663 0.151304729494 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0141949088493 0.056905535591 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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