It is argued that art galleries and museums should not be funded by governments, and that government money is better spent on necessities such as health care. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In the recent world, health care has been the main concern for many people because of its necessity; therefore, citizens would like their governments to fund more money for this category rather than art galleries and museums. However, I firmly oppose this belief since art galleries and museums would play the same essential role in terms of education and tourism.
To begin with, there is an undeniable fact that allocating financial resources to improve the health care system is a significant action. To bring it further, many third countries would be the easy targets for an outbreak of any infectious diseases because the governments of these countries are not able to create an efficient health care program. This situation could also happen with developed countries if the governments had no attention to this criterion. Thus, funding health care program seems more acceptable and beneficial to some people.
On the contrary, the first aim of organizing art galleries and museums is to educate the young generation about the countries’ culture and history. Although it would be much more convenient for people to obtain information about these topics on the Internet; the experience of being in the presence of the objects would be more thrilled and realistic than from a plain screen. As well, another aim is that art galleries and museums would boost up the country's finance through tourism by arousing interest from not only locals but also foreigners. More tourists would be attracted to enjoy a huge collection of priceless national masterpieces. An illustration of this point would be a huge number of annual visitors who come to The Louvre Museum to witness the aesthetic appeal of French art.
To sum up, I agree that funding medical programs are essential to a country’s health, but I also believe that art galleries and museums would help educate young people about history and attract tourists to increase the country finance.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, therefore, third, thus, well, on the contrary, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1615.20841683 101% => OK
No of words: 318.0 315.596192385 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14465408805 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22286093782 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68905253211 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.575471698113 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 506.74238477 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5186984085 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.333333333 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.83333333333 7.06120827912 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214271640534 0.244688304435 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0844790895478 0.084324248473 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034982447107 0.0667982634062 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139261437626 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287672937586 0.056905535591 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.0 13.0946893788 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.83 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.58950901804 107% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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