Is it good for families if parents need to travel a lot in their job or if they need to move to other cities Is moving to a new location positive for children

People argue that whether parents go on business trips a lot due to their job's demands or move to other location is better for their children and families. While there are some reasons against migration, I still believe that it is a good choice for kids and families.
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why migrating to a new city is more suitable. Firstly, living standards can be improved because of the reduction of costs of traveling. If there are 3 flights per month and average cost of each flight is 2,5 million VND, a person cannot save this amount of money for their luxury holidays or health care services. Secondly, movement has ability to decrease the rate of people ending in divorce. For examples, my friend called Hoa has just dissolved her marriage because her husband spent a little time for her and their children. This leads to negative development for her kids.
On the other hand, parents’ settlemnts and working in other city is positive development for children. Firstly, parents play vital role in shaping children personalities. Many scientists say that if a child grow up with the lack of parental involvement, he tends to be voilent, disobey. Therefore, the proportion of youths who turn to crime rises dramatically. Secondly, new living conditions help children improve their communication skills. To avoid being lonely in a new city, children have to communicate, share their hobbies, thoughts to make new friends.
In conclusion, the benefits from movement to a new city cannot be denied for both families and children.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (9 votes)

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1308.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 263.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97338403042 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02706775958 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72862901458 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.623574144487 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.2975951904 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.737745799 49.4020404114 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.2 106.682146367 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5333333333 20.7667163134 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.373032329515 0.244688304435 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106695313344 0.084324248473 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100376165616 0.0667982634062 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224352533591 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0669610718352 0.056905535591 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 50.2224549098 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.25 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 78.4519038076 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.1190380762 87% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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