It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers allowed to use to teach good behavior to children?
It is true that children should be educated to distinguish between right and wrong from the early age. Some people might even suggest punishment as a way to help them learn the differences. However, I completely disagree with this opinion due to a range of factors, particularly the emotional impact it may have on children.
To begin with, not only does punishment leave bad impressions about their parents, it also make children become fear of making mistakes again. In some cases, children may isolate themselves and create huge distance between them and their family. Asian families would be a good example for this situation. Unlike Western parents who tend to spend majority of their time explaining to their children about the distinction between good and bad behaviors, Asian parents would more likely to scold and may use physical punishment when their children did something wrong. This method of parenting might remind them not to make mistakes again but it would leave a permanent scar mentally and emotionally.
Furthermore, punishing too much may even have a backfired effect, in other words, some children would want to make the same mistakes again. Because they are still in the developing stage, they might still be impulsive and have unstable emotions at times. Therefore, this might cause them to disobey their parents when being punished too harsh. Personally, I would suggest implementing punishment only in the necessary circumstances, with an appropriate method that would not hurt the child. A slight reminder or criticism may be a good way to approach, bringing a better impact on children than the physical punishment.
In conclusion, punishment would be needed in some cases when teaching good behavior to children, as long as it is used with careful consideration and in suitable situations.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in other words, in some cases, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 7.85571142285 216% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1535.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 294.0 315.596192385 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22108843537 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77712079787 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568027210884 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2434220364 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.642857143 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.7667163134 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.64285714286 7.06120827912 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260737164742 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.095785690172 0.084324248473 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0491232620941 0.0667982634062 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.169970450246 0.151304729494 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832813687466 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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