It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the opinion
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children.
It is undeniable that children should be taught to distinguish between right and wrong in the early childhood. In term of this section, some people argued that parents should inflict punishment, however, I believe that punishment is not an effective education method because its backdraws might overweight the potential benefits.
On the one hand, appropriate punishment could help to change children’s awareness. When they do something wrong such as disobeying or lying, parents have to warn them about their bad behaviour as well as briefly explain about its negative consequences. However, if children are too stubborn to follow their parents’ advise, it is necessary to mete out fitting punishment. Actually, these punishment can act as a deterrent to remind them to avoid repeating same mistakes in the future. For example, once I disparaged my father’s gift, a pencil case, because it was similar to my friends’ one, my mother punished me by making me to use a plastic bag as my new pencil case for the whole school year.
On the other hand, harsh punishment causes a variety of issues. Firstly, it negatively affects children’s physology. It could lead to mental disorder and serious depression in a long time, especially with small kids. Furthermore, severe punishment could pose a threat to children’s physcial health. When parents get mad at children, they are easy to lose their temper and resort to violence. In fact, there are many cases in which children are injured due to violent discipline at home. Moreover, harsh punishment frightens children rather than educate them. They respond more to affection than to punishment, thus they try to avoid face contact with parents and turn away from them.
In general, adults could choose appropriate education method with the view to warning children from unwanted behaviour such as withdrawal privileges, detention or time-out. Besides, imposing punishment fit the crime is an useful notion, which would be making children to apologize for their mistakes, to clean when they drop water or to pick rubbish they dropped. These discipline teaches children about responsibilities and behaviours to shape child’s personalities.
In conclusion, Punishment should be the last method to mete out in educating children about right or wrong because of its disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, briefly, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in general, such as, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.3376753507 204% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2003.0 1615.20841683 124% => OK
No of words: 369.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 5.42818428184 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05865669248 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 176.041082164 125% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.59620596206 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 601.2 506.74238477 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.0959336801 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.421052632 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4210526316 20.7667163134 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.63157894737 7.06120827912 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 16.0 3.9879759519 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254309112692 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0815100879845 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.042289569358 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152075331836 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.036031381519 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.69 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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