It is important for people to take risks both in their professional lives and their personal lives Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages

In nowaday's highly competitive market, the efforts and decisions will decide wether can lead to the successfull career path as soon as possible. And the issue as to whether it is significant for participants in knowledge-based society to take risks in single-person and professional lives has remained a source of controversy. Personally, I completely agree with this notion and I'm of the belief that still having the advantages outweight the disadvantages in this situation.
On the one hand, Taking risks can lead to the success in both two angles. In terms of professional lives, The competitiveness between big companies as well as investing budgets into latter-day infrastructure or marketing campaigns to enhance the company's image. By contrast, the abusement of these factors can result in some risks and make a bad condition to consumer clients. So taking risks also help them summarize the lessons about business strategies and advance hands-on experiences to take into consideration separately in investing. In terms of personal lives, it can be the attributable to the impulsive mistakes or inexperience in all aspects of life.For example, with a single-person life, they can be able to suffer from the isolation or the loneliness day by day, and seem to be no directions. and they all need to be a shoulder to rely on any cases. But taking risks will help them empathise on themselves and research solutions to tackle this issue.
On the one hand, taking risks without thinking thoroughly will bring with its detrimental effects. if a investor overestimates their abilities and does not have a certain deliberation in any circumstances, they will be a failure in solving these works as well as giving these misguided decisions.This can make people be sacked the company or go the verge of bankruptcy. And in the remained angle,it is indispensable that they will difficulty in paying for daily expense, recreational activities. This makes them feel embarassed and pessimistic with parents and other relationships.
In conclusion, taking risks is a practical ability and decide whether they can stand more maturely after these failures in both professional lives and their personal lives. From these aforementioned ideas, i still hold fast to the belief that it can be appear the advantages outweigh the disadvantages in our life

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, still, well, as to, for example, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 57.0 41.998997996 136% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1970.0 1615.20841683 122% => OK
No of words: 375.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25333333333 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.23679512275 2.80592935109 115% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549333333333 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 623.7 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.5498740553 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.125 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.4375 20.7667163134 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.01903807615 339% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293850372335 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0939157924132 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0917200519737 0.0667982634062 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188568664431 0.151304729494 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0626388273592 0.056905535591 110% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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