It is inevitable that as technology advances, traditional cultures will be lost. It seems that we cannot have these two things together.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no shortage of opinion that most of the people asserts as well as argues that because of new innovation there is detrimental impact on the ancestral cultures they feel that because of the arrival of modern technology it tends to sabotage the culture that have been inherited from the past. However, I am highly contentious with these ideas. I strongly feel that the advancement in the technology helps to preserve the traditional culture in a sustainable way. Here to contradict the given prompt I will address the two main ideas that will help to address that technology is not hindrance for preserving the traditional culture.
Firstly, it is because of the technology such as internet as well various gadgets the young generation can hone through it and understand the discipline of their ancestral traditions by scrolling about their cultures through youtube and many other medium. Had there not been the modern technology the young children far away from their parents would refrain from understanding these sorts of things .Indeed, it is imperative that there should be provision of the new technology. For instance , in my village one of the family member father and mother used to reside in the foreign country but their children used to live alone in the home . Although, the parents are not in the vicinity of their children so that through the new of new technology advancement by using the social media they used to inculcate their children regarding their tradition and urge them to bound by the disciplines of their cultures as well as traditions.
Secondly, as the number of the technology have been reached at the zenith the various traditional cultures values as well as the principles still remained spotless the traditional cultures morale as well as disciplines have not been breached. Moreover, the advancement of the modern technology such as different gadgets , transportation etc have not affected the rituals of the indigineous tribe of certain place . For an example the development of the modern vehicle in my locality have not maculated our hindu festival dashain there used to be Dashain even before the advancement of new technology also as well as after the advancement of new vehicle there used to be Dashain in same way also. The advancement of modern vehicle doesnot posses any threats In our traditional culture rituals such as Dashain in present days also.
In a nutshell, I strongly contradict the given prompt that asserts that advancement in the new technology and traditional cannot be carried out smoothly. It is imperative that we should refrain those sorts of ideas and should glance at the positive parts of the new advancement technology and should use this in an effective way. By all means, there is little bit of symbiosis between the traditional culture as well as modern advancement in technology.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'innovation'.
Suggestion: innovation
...serts as well as argues that because of new innovation there is detrimental impact on the ance...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
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...ause of the arrival of modern technology it tends to sabotage the culture that ha...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a sustainable way" with adverb for "sustainable"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
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...from understanding these sorts of things .Indeed, it is imperative that there shou...
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Suggestion: Indeed
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Message: Did you mean 'provisioned'?
Suggestion: provisioned
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...n the vicinity of their children so that through the new of new technology advanc...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'cultures'' or 'culture's'?
Suggestion: cultures'; culture's
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...ern technology such as different gadgets , transportation etc have not affected th...
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...al dashain there used to be Dashain even before the advancement of new technology...
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
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Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...rituals such as Dashain in present days also. In a nutshell, I strongly contradict ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in an effective way" with adverb for "effective"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ancement technology and should use this in an effective way. By all means, there is little bit of s...
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Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, still, well, for instance, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 24.0651302605 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 41.998997996 164% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2389.0 1615.20841683 148% => OK
No of words: 471.0 315.596192385 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07218683652 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.20363070211 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83733244468 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433121019108 0.561755894193 77% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 754.2 506.74238477 149% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.2745726103 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.266666667 106.682146367 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.4 20.7667163134 151% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.6 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 18.0 5.01903807615 359% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239597113447 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0925949875648 0.084324248473 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0428750673217 0.0667982634062 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.158759296257 0.151304729494 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400689012553 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 50.2224549098 80% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.72 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.22 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.