It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people have valued the role of local history to schoolchildren over against that of world history. In may opinion, I disagree with those people as both of them are equally essential young learners.
Studying the history of their hometown is for sure an indispensable part of school's curriculum during student's early education. I believe having through insights into what happened in the past at one's locality develops his patriotism. For example children of primary and secondary schools in my village are taught about how their ancestors defended their land against outside intruders and reclaimed sovereignty. Therefor, those young children who take pride in their origin and treasure the life they have today. Additionally, I think it's not only student privilege but also their responsibility to know about their own history to understand their hometown's traditional values and identity.
From another angle, learning about world history share equal importance just as local one. Acquiring knowledge about the world's past events equips students with a more well-rounded perspective of live. Lessons about the World War of Feminism protest against woman's abuse and discrimination would help those learners enhance their understanding about various aspects of the world. Furthermore, I think that being taught about the order countries' historical backgrounds would benefit young learners in their future career. Students who accumulate knowledge of this particular field at an early age would possess a golden selling point to work for foreign enterprises, especially those who highly value company culture like Japan.
In conclusion, I believe the significance of domestic and international history cannot be brought into comparison to see which one is more necessary because they have distinctively equal meaning to children.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, second, so, well, for example, i think, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63669064748 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87974073171 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.651079136691 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.4644640041 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.538461538 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3846153846 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.61538461538 7.06120827912 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222974431495 0.244688304435 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0828735236627 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0719075751112 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126575907527 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0561113571198 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.24 50.2224549098 66% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.73 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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