It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people assume that school should focus on teaching local history than world history. I completely disagree with this opinion because both play an equally important role.
On the one hand, a range of benefits from studying local history offer to the young. I hold the belief that through history lessons and being taught about magnificent events in the past, their patriotism and civic pride would be developed. For instance, when schoolchildren learn about how their ancestors had suffered trauma or even sacrificed to defend their hometown against the invaders, they would fully appreciate the freedom and the peace they have today. In addition, it is necessary for everybody to acknowledge the history of their locality so that they have thorough insights into their roots as well as traditional values of their country.
On the other hand, parallel to local history, world history is also a must in the school's curriculum. A reason for this point of view is that some of the world's past events had profound impacts on the world. For example, the success of the October Revolution of Russia had encouraged movements of national liberation in many other ethnic, which marked a great move of contemporary politics. Furthermore, the world has become globalized, it is not strange today that a group of people like to live in a foreign country. Obviously, understanding of the history and culture of the host country would make it is easier for those people to reinforce the relationship between them and the expatriates from that country.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that both local history and that of international history are significant for children's early education.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'schools'' or 'school's'?
Suggestion: schools'; school's
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Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...A reason for this point of view is that some of the worlds past events had profound impacts...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, so, well, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1416.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16788321168 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75639999924 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.598540145985 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2706410397 49.4020404114 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8333333333 20.7667163134 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.75 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262392902145 0.244688304435 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0936060875029 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521376859666 0.0667982634062 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15769861401 0.151304729494 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0282012224345 0.056905535591 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.88 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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