It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Nobody can ignore the importance of the knowledge about our local history handed to us by our predecessors. However, much can be gained by knowing that there is a bigger picture waiting to be collected and learned from.
“There is lessons in history”. This quote appears to be the best reason to study history. Much can be learnt from certain local historic events, why did some wars occurred, why several political decisions had been made; to answer these questions: was it for the betterment of the people, or was it made only for personal gains? No matter the answer, these events made the situation we are in nowadays. Local history can teach us about our community and how some events having impact on the lives of ordinary people. These lessons can aid schoolchildren what they need about thinking twice before making an important decision and then, taking action wisely. It can teach them patience when needed, or to answer harshly when required (e.g. defending the innocents).
Yet, learning about the world history has its benefits. It can inspire the schoolchildren and it is the best way to understand foreign cultures. It is the bigger picture which is vital to some extent, to understand human and societal evolutions. The more important reasons to study history is that it provides our identity and it is essential to perform our roles as proud and fruitful citizens of our community. Besides, it applies directly to many careers and can clearly help us in our working lives.
In conclusion, I partly agree with both presented perspectives for the importance of studying territorial or foreign history for schoolchildren. History made the human being what they are now, no matter the place of occurrence, but for the knowledge and wisdom we can obtain from its lessons.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 7, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[3]
Message: Did you mean 'There are lessons'?
Suggestion: There are lessons
...be collected and learned from. 'There is lessons in history'. This quote appears to...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: DID_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean 'occur'?
Suggestion: occur
...ocal historic events, why did some wars occurred, why several political decisions had be...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: IN_NOWADAYS[1]
Message: nowadays is used without 'in'. Use simply: 'nowadays'.
Suggestion: nowadays
... these events made the situation we are in nowadays. Local history can teach us about our c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, e.g., however, so, then, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1504.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03010033445 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74374715576 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571906354515 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2469823772 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.0 106.682146367 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 7.06120827912 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236819991379 0.244688304435 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0768196255132 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066914288696 0.0667982634062 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149361780201 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0310743181332 0.056905535591 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.0946893788 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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