It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent, do you argee or disargee?
It is argued that learning about local history is more essential for children than learning about world history. I disagree with this point of view because think that children should study both local and world history.
On the one hand, children need to learn about their local history. This would help them understand more about the living condition of older generations, therefore, the generation gap can be narrowed. For instacne, learning about a famine of Vietnam in 1945 will help children empathize with the difficult life of their grandparents and they will appreciate the value of good living condition nowadays. In addition, learning about local history makes children understand more about local traditions so that they will proud more of these and can maintain as well as develop these traditions.
On the other hand, schoolchildren should learn about world history as well. The first reason is that local history is a part of world history. Learning about world history is also a good way to help children learn about their local one. The second reason is that by learning world history, children will broaden their mind about the world, especially about the world situation in different periods and the international relationship during these time. This will help children adapt easier to the globalization today.
In conclusion, I believe that schoolchildren should learn about local history and world history equally.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, in addition, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1208.0 1615.20841683 75% => OK
No of words: 229.0 315.596192385 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27510917031 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.89008302616 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63235845493 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 176.041082164 61% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.467248908297 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 355.5 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8096810988 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 106.682146367 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0833333333 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.58333333333 7.06120827912 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392680309829 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.200730043793 0.084324248473 238% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124483729709 0.0667982634062 186% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.309178448632 0.151304729494 204% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0565146603152 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.58950901804 86% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 78.4519038076 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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