It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As awareness of remaining healthy has been raised among urban citizens, some believe that government expenditure on encouragement for an active lifestyle is more beneficial than medication. Personally, I agree with the statement, and this essay will explain why this is a positive trend.
It must be admitted that remedies for illness are indeed essential and therefore require a considerable public-private collaboration to research. However, contributing to improving residents’ daily life seems to have several advantages in the long term.
Firstly, it would save for the government a budget if authorities decide to concentrate on healthy life promotion. Medical treatments are usually costly, and even prohibitive sometimes to the poor if they do not receive financial support. Meanwhile, to construct facilities for extracurricular activities frequently consumes inconsiderable state investment. For example, local authorities must only spend a little to generate public places in residential areas, which allow dwellers to play sports. Investing in such facility, rule makers not only encourage people to engage in healthy activities, but they would also save money to invest in other needs, such as public service.
Moreover, to prevent the diseases is obviously better than to cure them. Many sicknesses have long-term (even permanent sometimes) negative side effects after cured, and convalescents may struggle with these syndromes for long time. Therefore, patients would surely get their living quality dwindled. For this reason, instead of aiming for the cure, the government can impose regulations that use state investment to support entrepreneurs relating to lifestyle improvement. For instance, bicycle-sharing service or dietary supplement business should receive tax reduction.
In conclusion, although hospital healthcare is vital for residential life, I believe the public contribution should also concentrate on motivating people to stay hygienic. This is a money saving option and additionally can get rid of unwanted effects.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90301003344 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19678561391 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.682274247492 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0474621361 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.3125 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13702089157 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380938071851 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327063723399 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690167732424 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266621917914 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.9 11.3001002004 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.94 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, well, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.3376753507 180% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1765.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 299.0 315.596192385 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.90301003344 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19678561391 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.682274247492 0.561755894193 121% => OK
syllable_count: 563.4 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0474621361 49.4020404114 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.3125 106.682146367 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 7.06120827912 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.13702089157 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0380938071851 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327063723399 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0690167732424 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0266621917914 0.056905535591 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 27.83 50.2224549098 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.9 11.3001002004 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.94 12.4159519038 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.34 8.58950901804 120% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 78.4519038076 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.