It is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is widely argued that it is more important to spend public money promoting a healthy lifestyle to prevent illness than to spend it on the treatment of people who are already ill. In my opinion, although I strongly agree this first view but I believe that government should spend public money curing sick people as well
In the one hand, reinforcing a healthy lifestyle is purely crucial and attractive for community based on various reasons. One reason is that people could avoid illness threatening to the human’s life. Nowadays, most countries often pay attention to people health in order that promote the resistance. Thus, governments develop about medical examination machine or examine health yearly for all people. As far as I know, machinery technology is definitely extended so doctors are able to cure more patients. For instance, In Vietnam hospital, doctors cured for numerous cancer child in order that they could go to school like others every year. Another reason is that promoting a healthy lifestyle means promoting country. When the country is expanded, people are completely main factor that decides the triumph country. Hence, people health is upgrading simultaneously in order to response to their health requirement. Especially Southeast Asia countries where have unstable weather, people often get sick such as allergic or flu. In contract, if people got sick as usual, they could not have adequate health leading to the exterminate countries. For instance, Dominica is one of the poor countries in the world because inhabitants always get sick around the year so they could not assist their countries.
However, I assume that governments should invest on the treatment of people who are already ill. Because of governments helping, people could be healed so they are light-hearted, even grateful to the governments who bring a chance of human living. Since then, they make the best of creating the success for cabinet. Moreover, from curing for illness people, doctors could find the new method that boost people resistant.
In conclusion, I also presume that people should spend public money on reinforcing the healthy lifestyle and curing the illness people at the same time in order to promote the developing country.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...rder to promote the developing country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 362.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23756906077 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36191444098 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69601371896 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.527624309392 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.6613892442 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.333333333 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1111111111 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.22222222222 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.345653535552 0.244688304435 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115887139491 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167419086262 0.0667982634062 251% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289414027314 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.18186336491 0.056905535591 320% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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