It is not necessary to travel to travel to other places to learn the culture of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films and the internet . Do you agree or disagree?
In this contemporary society, it is widely believed that people can broaden their horizons in different aspects such as nature, society by books, films or social network. Hence, a trip to another nation is not essential in term of acquiring more information. In my personal perspective, although alternative sources including movies, books or social media may act as useful tools for people to learn new cultures,I consider that such an important role of traveling cannot be ignored.
On the other hand, watching films or reading books is more accessible to people from different classes. In addition, many impoverished residents find it difficult to afford such a large amount of expenditure when going to other countries. For instance, it is Europe that humans cannot possess sufficient opportunities to travel abroad due to the lack of funding. Hence, acquiring books or films and accessing the wirless network seem to be more straightforward for them.
However, I still believe that traveling overseas is extremely beneficial and cannot be underestimated. To begin with, practical experience is more superior compared to theoretical knowledge. Additionally, many people find it more straightforward to remember patterns or traditional items by observing through bare eyes as being exposed by a large number of words in books seems to be more ineffective in this term . Secondly,having an opportunity to travel is more interesting and attractive compared to theoretical knowledge or internet. Additionally, traveling abroad helps tourists not only widen their perspectives in various cultures but also experience these cultural aspects by themselves. For instance, it is Korea that travelers can learn how to make kimchi, which is one of the most special cusines in korea, and try to play traditional instruments. Such valuable experience like that cannot be gratified by surfing the net or watching documentary films.
Taking everything into consideration, I approve with this statement in some perspectives. Although I cannot deny the convenience of books, films or internet, I actually believe that benefits from traveling internationally should be appreciated.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, for instance, in addition, such as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 331.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.56797583082 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26537283232 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24912055276 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583081570997 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 506.74238477 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2550575078 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1875 106.682146367 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6875 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.9375 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.01903807615 139% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.226990146061 0.244688304435 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0688340788565 0.084324248473 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0554246227532 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136085984319 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024111343486 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 13.0946893788 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 78.4519038076 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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