It is wiser to use your money to gain meaningful experiences than to use it to acquire possessions.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many people choose to spend money on tangible things such as new clothes, the latest cell phone, or a new bicycle. Of course some of these items are necessities and should be prioritized. However, I would argue that many people waste money collecting things. The best use of extra money is creating memorable experiences.
When I am old and look back on what I enjoyed about my life, I am confident that I will be much more nostalgic about the experiences I’ve had than the things that I’ve owned. This is because major life events--weddings, graduations, family gatherings, and conquering significant challenges--help to define who we are and what is unique about our lives. Most things we buy grow old, break, or go out of fashion, but memories remain as long as we can recall them. Therefore, if the choice is between buying a nice car, or taking a memorable family vacation, I believe the answer is clear; experiences create precious memories, while a car depreciates in value the day you drive it off the lot.
Additionally, experiences can lead to growth in a way that purchasing things cannot. When I was in college, I used my savings to pay for a summer abroad in the Dominican Republic. I could have bought a lot of nice things with the money I used for tuition, travel, and lodging that summer, but I never regretted the choice. During my time abroad, I navigated a new country while using a new language. It was not an easy time, but it was very rewarding. The experience shaped me in important ways. Indeed, I have never owned a physical object that had such a profound effect on my life as the summer I spent in the Dominican Republic.
People should spend money wisely. It would not be smart to go on an unaffordable vacation, or to take out a huge loan to pay for a wedding. Nevertheless, when choosing between spending extra money on things or on creating memories and experiences, I believe the latter is the wisest choice. In the end, it is our memories that hold the most enduring value.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, look, nevertheless, so, therefore, while, of course, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 357.0 315.596192385 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.6918767507 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83540364759 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.543417366947 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 9.0 0.809619238477 1112% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4812178321 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.1578947368 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.7894736842 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.10526315789 7.06120827912 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131166748761 0.244688304435 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0397980493461 0.084324248473 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037678585912 0.0667982634062 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0732476522531 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0261268495702 0.056905535591 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.0946893788 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.58950901804 90% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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