A lot of people believe that the amount of violence shown on TV and in the cinema affects the actions of our young people and therefore increases the amount of violence in our society today. Do you agree or disagree?
It is commonly believed that some television programs and films played in the cinema have an extremely violent and inappropriate content, which negatively impacts on youngsters' behaviour. In my opinion, this might be an explanation for the increasing amount of violence occuring in our society today. However, I also think that the poor education that the child has received could be a plausible reason for the matter in question.
Going to the cinema is something young people do every now and then in order to spend time with their friends or family, as opposed to watching television, which is part of their daily schedule. Today, many teenagers are addicted to television, which is a serios problem, given the fact that the majority of them are unaware of the effects it can have upon their behaviour. Both the film industry and the television promote characters who are not necessarily evil, but they are constantly involved in the fights. Most youngsters tend to idolize these characters and want to be as powerful as they are. They do not differentiate between reality and fiction anymore. Consequently, they become violent and feel entitled to bully those people whom they consider inferior to them.
The news programs can also affect the way children act. The world is far from being a safe place. For instance, watching news related to wars, crimes or different types of accidents can strongly impact emotionally on children. They might believe that violence is the only alternative to survive and take care of themselves.
On the other hand, the child's wild personality could reflect the family environment he has been raised in. A teenager who has benefited from valuable parenting is bound to be able to stick to reality and not imitate everything they see on television or in the cinema. Conversely, one who has lived in a family environment where acts of aggression have been frequent and deemed ordinary is likely to develop ferocious traits.
To conclude, there is no doubt that the programs and films young people watch on television and in the cinema respectively damage their behaviour. I strongly support the idea that measures against this unpleasant phenomenon ought to be taken so as to reduce the amount of violence faced by our society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'youngsters'' or 'youngster's'?
Suggestion: youngsters'; youngster's
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Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...the cinema is something young people do every now and then in order to spend time with their frien...
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...unpleasant phenomenon ought to be taken so as to reduce the amount of violence faced by ...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'conversely', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'then', 'as to', 'for instance', 'no doubt', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.227383863081 0.247107183377 92% => OK
Verbs: 0.195599022005 0.155533422707 126% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0635696821516 0.0946595960268 67% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0562347188264 0.0501214627716 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0537897310513 0.0437548338989 123% => OK
Prepositions: 0.100244498778 0.122226691241 82% => OK
Participles: 0.0537897310513 0.0403226058552 133% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.74296782886 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Infinitives: 0.041564792176 0.0326793684256 127% => OK
Particles: 0.00244498777506 0.00163938923432 149% => OK
Determiners: 0.0904645476773 0.0861772015684 105% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0195599022005 0.021408717616 91% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0220048899756 0.011925033212 185% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2270.0 1933.35771543 117% => OK
No of words: 376.0 316.048096192 119% => OK
Chars per words: 6.03723404255 6.12580529183 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.20517956788 105% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.359042553191 0.374742101984 96% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.287234042553 0.28420135186 101% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.218085106383 0.203846283523 107% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.127659574468 0.137316102897 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74296782886 2.80594681477 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 176.037074148 123% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.574468085106 0.56093040696 102% => OK
Word variations: 66.3508169914 60.7387585426 109% => OK
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0891783567 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.8888888889 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.4744497122 49.517814964 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.111111111 127.492653851 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.8888888889 20.7743622355 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.722222222222 0.814263465372 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 3.99599198397 75% => OK
Readability: 49.6122931442 49.1944974215 101% => OK
Elegance: 1.248 1.69124875643 74% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.457636631108 0.332605444948 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0911274073382 0.102741220458 89% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0615757254851 0.0668466124924 92% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.536384521233 0.534860350844 100% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.106898830556 0.148594505496 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.17622942558 0.134430193775 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0910380012829 0.0742795772207 123% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.279654147602 0.324371583561 86% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0268238420909 0.0638462369009 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.318345603451 0.228012699653 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0710686484423 0.058150111329 122% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.68436873747 58% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.9879759519 276% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 5.90881763527 51% => OK
Negative topic words: 8.0 2.5751503006 311% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 1.9629258517 51% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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