As major cities in the world are growing today, so do their problems. What are problems for young people who are living in the cities as the result of continued growth? How problems might be solved?
Many young people living in the growing cities are said to have more opportunity to develop and fulfill their personalities. Contrast to this belief, they are facing many problems and to solve these problems, young people need the help from not only their families but also from the society.
Young people in growing cities are having trouble in terms of social skills and nature appreciation. First, as many young people living in major cities have advantage to get access to the latest modern technology, they spend too much time with those technologies and forget about hanging around with real friends and having read conversations. It is a common scene now when one walks into a coffee shop and sees youngsters sitting next to each other keep looking at their smartphones or taking photos of the food in stead of talking. Second, many young people living in big cities may stand a better chance of having better education, but at the same time they are digressing further and further from nature. In developing cities, people are surrounded with high concrete buildings, not with giant trees with large shades. Young people have got used to these scenes and thus, they do not know how to appreciate nature. If young people now cannot love nature, it is hard to assure that the next generation will protect the environment better than we do today.
In my opinion, these problems can be solved by two solutions: raising awareness and applying practical methods. First, raising awareness is of most important, as awareness is the root of actions. To exemplify, parents should use certain measures and talk to their children about how to use modern technology properly. If children understand how detrimental technology can become when being overused, they will learn to use it wisely. Thus, when growing up, these young citizens will help protect the green life. Second, practical applications will help the young people more active in dealing with their problems. Parents and societies should spend time on guiding young people since they are little kids. Activities such as planning trees, teaching children how to take care of small plants in their houses are good to develop children’s love for nature.
In conclusion, with the sharp growth of cities in the world, young people living there are having both advantages and disadvantages. With the two most common problems are social skills and environmental awareness, raising awareness as well as having practical applications since young citizens are merely kids are two measures I believe will have positive effects.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'instead of'?
Suggestion: instead of
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, second, so, thus, well, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2167.0 1615.20841683 134% => OK
No of words: 422.0 315.596192385 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13507109005 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58055131229 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 218.0 176.041082164 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516587677725 0.561755894193 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 654.3 506.74238477 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.0025291368 49.4020404114 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.052631579 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2105263158 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57894736842 7.06120827912 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 8.67935871743 173% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289179838133 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0938960070335 0.084324248473 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0615036924999 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.187737131508 0.151304729494 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396715068278 0.056905535591 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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