In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.
In the past, many people were killed by diseases. However, throughout the advance of medical technology, scientists and doctors discovered cures, so this had brang the increase of our life expectancy. Some people even hope to live forever. But increase of life expectancy has both downsided and upsides.
One negative aspect of rising life expectancy is that there are even a large number of eldery who are dispersed from family or who are isolated. These condition incur depression of eldery people, it even be lead to dying alone without knowing their family members.
What is more, after retirement, some eldery people must work because their financial system can’t support their life safety. In this case, they would search for simple or temporary jobs with young generations. It may not be easy for eldery people, and many young generations wouldn’t want to compete with them for getting a job.
Despite the fact that there are many drawbacks of long life expectancy, the greatest number of people are optimistic of being eldery. Many scientists had proved that the more we’re aging, the more we feel happinesses. If healthy eldery people are enjoying their life, they will satisfy their aging.
In conclusion, I would say the government has responsibility of facilizing well-thought system for eldery life. Principally, everybody would want the increasing of ‘health’ life expectancy. Therefore the government has to consider what would be equipped in their countries.
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Suggestion: Therefore,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, therefore, well, as to, in conclusion, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1259.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 236.0 315.596192385 75% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33474576271 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.91947592106 4.20363070211 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75642351303 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.610169491525 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 396.0 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.0160903534 49.4020404114 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9333333333 106.682146367 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7333333333 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134652202257 0.244688304435 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0523128844497 0.084324248473 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0474575386832 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0792105992555 0.151304729494 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0428732179264 0.056905535591 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.34 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.58950901804 97% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 78.4519038076 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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