In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?
When people graduate school and start work, they get a new home as leaving parents. Meanwhile, in the same situation, some people want to live with their parents still. In this essay, I’m going to describe which option is more beneficial or not.
There are several advantages when you are independent from your parents. It’s challenging but obviously rewarding. First, you’ll obtain a sense of responsibility. You have to figure out how to manage your households from zero to ten. There is no substitute for doing it yourself. It will be hard from scratch, but it brings the feeling of ownership to you. In this process, you can get confidence also in your work.
Some people claim that living with your parents is more beneficial to you. Their bottom line is the aspect of economic reason. I can exemplify my country’s cases. In South Korea, many young adults live with their parents before their marriage. Because the house rent is extremely expensive. In order to live on your own, most people can’t avoid applying for a loan. Therefore, people rather choose saving their money living with their parents.
I can see more clear advantages in independence though. In spite of the fact that you have to pay rent every month, having said that, there are more adventurous things. You can invite your friends and have a good time with them whenever you want. You can decorate your room as you like instead of your parent’s choices. Even though your small extent of your room or high rent, you will overcome these problems as time goes by.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 245, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...th their parents before their marriage. Because the house rent is extremely expensive. ...
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Line 5, column 399, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to save'.
Suggestion: to save
...a loan. Therefore, people rather choose saving their money living with their parents. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, still, therefore, while, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1291.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 266.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85338345865 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03850299372 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.44428272957 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 176.041082164 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609022556391 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 385.2 506.74238477 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.2975951904 59% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 19.0356885354 49.4020404114 39% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 58.6818181818 106.682146367 55% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.0909090909 20.7667163134 58% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.81818181818 7.06120827912 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 3.4128256513 234% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219296424628 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675218661436 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0705931818431 0.0667982634062 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140777692918 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0774864330139 0.056905535591 136% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.5 13.0946893788 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 50.2224549098 152% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 11.3001002004 50% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.96 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.58950901804 83% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 78.4519038076 62% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 9.78957915832 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.1190380762 67% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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