In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Childhood obesity has become an alarming sign of deteriorating public health over the world. In this regard, some people believe governments should do whatever is needed to prevent obesity in children. However, I believe that the responsibility of the citizen is the most important key for combating the overweight children crisis.
Ensuring the well-being of its people is one of the government's fundamental role. That is to say, if there is any serious threat to the people, such as childhood obesity, the government will warn and implement effective solutions. Nevertheless, apart from encouraging regular exercise and healthy eating habits, I do not feel that the government can do more things.
The duty to controvert obesity at younger generation should not fall on governments alone. Although the government may have great obesity prevention programs for children, it is not fully effective without any the proper care of parents as the government cannot control the nutrition intake and activities of every child. From here can see the importance of parents, who can directly develop a balanced diet for their kids by choosing healthy eating patterns that contain less sugar and fat. On the other hand, obesity is also caused by lack of physical activity. Surprisingly, the sedentary lifestyle favoured by a large amount of youth nowadays and parents are the only ones who can either encourage or force their children to do more physical tasks or exercise.
In conclusion, of course, the government should do what they can to curb the obesity epidemic but can not also ignore the responsibility of parents because they play a vital role in this war. Therefore, proper care is required from both the government and parents.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, nevertheless, so, therefore, well, apart from, in conclusion, of course, such as, on the other hand, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1460.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.21428571429 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85092179865 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.596428571429 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 462.6 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.5423836436 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.307692308 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0769230769 7.06120827912 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217937485976 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0763330310828 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608003135511 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139997206764 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0483818106107 0.056905535591 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 13.0946893788 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.94 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 78.4519038076 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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