In many countries, children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that government should have the responsibility. To what extend do you agree or disagree ?
Obesity is becoming an increasing problem not only among adults but also among children. Hence, children these days are unhealthier than they were in the past and some people believe that it is the responsibility of the government to resolve this issue. However, I believe that it is the duty of the people and not that of the government to make sure that their kids are healthy and are in a good shape.
To begin, it is a fact that everyone especially children have started to consume more junk food in recent times. However, no government encourages its people to eat fast food. Hence, it is the choice made by people to eat a lot of slap-up meals. For instance, there has been an abundant availability of fast foods like shawarma in recent times. This is due to the fact that there has been a surge in its demand as people including children are enjoying it a lot. If they had realized that it is their eating habits that made them obese then they would have stayed fit by having a balanced diet. Hence, it is clear that more the fatty food consumed by children, there are more chances of them suffering from obesity and that government has nothing to do with this.
Secondly, with the advent of digital technologies like smart phones and laptops more children are getting addicted to them, resulting in a sedentary lifestyle as they spend most of their time playing video games rather than doing physical activities. A clear example of this would be the increasing popularity of video games like PUBG, which is played by people of all ages from all over the world. Therefore, it is the duty of parents and teachers and not that of the government's to make sure that their child is involving in some sports activities to keep themselves fit.
In conclusion, this essay has argued that it is the people's duty to make sure that their children have a healthy diet and do sports to stay healthy.
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...thy diet and do sports to stay healthy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 13.1623246493 167% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 7.85571142285 25% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 45.0 24.0651302605 187% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1568.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 339.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62536873156 5.12529762239 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45831228894 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489675516224 0.561755894193 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 492.3 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2870629933 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2142857143 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.92857142857 7.06120827912 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195770878692 0.244688304435 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.071662195635 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462377376768 0.0667982634062 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129823028399 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0449309073662 0.056905535591 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.87 12.4159519038 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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