In any field of endeavor, it is impossible to make a significant contribution without first being strongly influenced by past achievements within that field.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Numerous inventions have been made in the past that have significantly contributed to their respective field of study. There have also been various failed attempts in inventing something innovative. Therefore, it is important for a person to study about the past events to contribute significantly to a particular field. Therefore, I mostly agree with the given prompt mainly for two reasons. However, there are certain circumstance where knowing about the past might not have a significant impact in influencing a person.
To begin, when a person studies about the inventions made by scientists and the impact those inventions has had on the betterment of society might greatly inspire a him/her to make such a contribution. For instance, the invention of Alternating Current by Nikhola Tesla, an Electrical engineer, is one the most important invention that powers the world today. The invention of current has completely changed the lives of poeple all over the world. We use electric current to power everything around us from mobile phones to the satellites that revolve around the earth. Therefore, when a person studies about this invention he would definitely get inspired to make a similar contibution to the society. The person wouldn't have been inspired if he didn't know about the past achievements and it would be improbable for that person to make a significant contribution.
Furthermore, it not only important to study about the past achievements but also about the failed attempts in making such a contribution. As Edison said, "I didn't fail 1000 times, but i have found 1000 ways how not to make an electric bulb". Therefore, studying about the failures can teach a person some important lessons he/she couldn't find on any scientific books. For instance, considering an invention in which Nikhola Tesla couldn't succeed. He envisioned providing unlimited power to all people on the world but couldn't succeed in it. However, he has successfully proved theoretically that such an invention is possible. Hence, if a student learns this he would be inspired to implement the idea which Nikhola Tesla couldn't. Therefore, this would lead to a significant contribution in the field of science. Hence, the influence that the past has on a person can significantly can help him to make some ground-breaking contributions to that field.
However, there are certain instances where a person comes with an extremely innovative idea that no one in the past has thought about. For instance, when Bill gates, the founder of Microsoft, found the world's first operating system there have been no achievements in the past related to that field. Therefore, some times, it is possible that a person makes a significant contribution to a field without being influenced by past accomplishments. However, this is very rare and only a very few people are capable of making such a contribution. Hence, for the majority of people it is almost impossible to accomplish something significant without being influenced by past achievements.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'him'?
Suggestion: a; him
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2546201232 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05871438273 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437371663244 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.0 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6114915814 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.36 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.48 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.12 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203732294758 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690819828287 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688604013862 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148345269717 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681618154453 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 164, Rule ID: DT_PRP[1]
Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'a' or 'him'?
Suggestion: a; him
...erment of society might greatly inspire a him/her to make such a contribution. For in...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 715, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
... contibution to the society. The person wouldnt have been inspired if he didnt know abo...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 748, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...person wouldnt have been inspired if he didnt know about the past achievements and it...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...out the failed attempts in making such a contribution. As Edison said, 'I di...
^^
Line 5, column 164, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... contribution. As Edison said, 'I didnt fail 1000 times, but i have found 1000 ...
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Line 5, column 342, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... a person some important lessons he/she couldnt find on any scientific books. For insta...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 442, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ing an invention in which Nikhola Tesla couldnt succeed. He envisioned providing unlimi...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 530, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...ed power to all people on the world but couldnt succeed in it. However, he has successf...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 734, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
... implement the idea which Nikhola Tesla couldnt. Therefore, this would lead to a signif...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 582, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Hence, for the majority of people it is almost impossible to accomplish somethin...
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Line 7, column 685, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... being influenced by past achievements.
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, therefore, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2559.0 2235.4752809 114% => OK
No of words: 487.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2546201232 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69766713281 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05871438273 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.437371663244 0.4932671777 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 801.0 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6114915814 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 102.36 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.48 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.12 5.21951772744 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 7.80617977528 141% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203732294758 0.243740707755 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0690819828287 0.0831039109588 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688604013862 0.0758088955206 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148345269717 0.150359130593 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681618154453 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.1392134831 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.89 8.38706741573 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 100.480337079 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.