In many countries children are engaged in different kinds of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it a valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion?
The issue of whether or not children should be engaged in some paid work has sparked a heated debate. While some argue that having some employment experience is conducive to a child’s learning and development, I contend that it would bring harm to the child’s heath and learning.
First of all, a workplace designed for adults is normally shortage of child-friendly facilities. Desks and chairs are too high for a child; the light switches are installed on the walls unreachable by children; also emergency training and facilities such as phones are only provided to adults. Furthermore, various hazards such as polluted air and chemical fumes are still produced in factories and farms. Undoubtedly young people would suffer in such workplaces.
Also, children would find it frustrating when they are not properly inducted before starting a job. A child working in a cement factory would feel a setback when he could not get immediate support while struggling with the procedures of recording different raw materials that is required by the job. Further, without sufficient support, a child’s misunderstanding or inappropriately communicating with adults would only disappoint him and prevents him from active learning and interacting with other people.
To conclude, a child’s paid employment experience would lead to a negative impact on their health and active learning. However, recognizing the importance of children’s learning and their awareness of responsibility, it is advisable to encourage them to be involved in some volunteering opportunities where they can meaningfully learn and interact with other people with sufficient care and support in place for such jobs.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 14, Rule ID: WHETHER[7]
Message: Perhaps you can shorten this phrase to just 'whether'. It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Suggestion: whether
The issue of whether or not children should be engaged in some paid...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'first', 'furthermore', 'however', 'if', 'so', 'still', 'while', 'in fact', 'such as', 'first of all']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.254125412541 0.247107183377 103% => OK
Verbs: 0.148514851485 0.155533422707 95% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0825082508251 0.0946595960268 87% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0561056105611 0.0501214627716 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.039603960396 0.0437548338989 91% => OK
Prepositions: 0.112211221122 0.122226691241 92% => OK
Participles: 0.0627062706271 0.0403226058552 156% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.24787172586 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.023102310231 0.0326793684256 71% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0726072607261 0.0861772015684 84% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.029702970297 0.021408717616 139% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.013201320132 0.011925033212 111% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1708.0 1933.35771543 88% => OK
No of words: 261.0 316.048096192 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.54406130268 6.12580529183 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20517956788 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.409961685824 0.374742101984 109% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.340996168582 0.28420135186 120% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.283524904215 0.203846283523 139% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.187739463602 0.137316102897 137% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24787172586 2.80594681477 116% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 176.037074148 91% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613026819923 0.56093040696 109% => OK
Word variations: 66.0191648366 60.7387585426 109% => OK
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0891783567 68% => OK
Sentence length: 23.7272727273 20.7743622355 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.6567736527 49.517814964 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 155.272727273 127.492653851 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7272727273 20.7743622355 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.0 0.814263465372 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.99599198397 25% => OK
Readability: 57.8268895855 49.1944974215 118% => OK
Elegance: 1.75675675676 1.69124875643 104% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282743983453 0.332605444948 85% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119106732074 0.102741220458 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.053007789495 0.0668466124924 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.554600263653 0.534860350844 104% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.17072986507 0.148594505496 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116715440973 0.134430193775 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0503943899207 0.0742795772207 68% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.209494388947 0.324371583561 65% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0355615227787 0.0638462369009 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188212437662 0.228012699653 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439364914186 0.058150111329 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.68436873747 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 5.90881763527 34% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 9.0 10.4468937876 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.