In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for learning and taking responsibility.
What are your opinions on this?
More and more children are inevitably engaged in some paid work. Although its profits have been regarded as valuable work experience, the ability to learn, and taking responsibility, many still consider this completely wrong. In my opinion, children should not be engaged in paid works as its negative impacts are much heavier than its positive profits.
There is no concern that there would be many benefits if children were engaged in paid works early. Children could gain valuable experience and knowledge from working, which schools could not teach them. Therefore, they would be years of experience ahead of their colleagues who are not working early. The children could also be responsible for their relatives since they have understood the difficulties of earning incomes.
Nevertheless, engaging in earning money too early has many long-term negative impacts. Firstly, since they had an income, they will consider this as “their money” and start to waste them on unnecessary products or services rather than helping the family’s economics. Even more, because of working too early, they will be less focused on studying; therefore, their academic capacity will fall rapidly. This will create a chain effect as many universities require an excellent academic capacity if they want to enroll in, and the companies require a good diploma if they want to work for them. In a nutshell, children might earn a fair amount of money now; in the long term, however, they could not have a sufficient income to support their own or their family economics.
In conclusion, it is clear that children should not be engaged in paid works too early. Despite many benefits, the long-term negative impacts are too heavy to be left unconsidered.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 27.0 41.998997996 64% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0462633452 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53299299146 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 176.041082164 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505338078292 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 450.9 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 5.43587174349 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 16.0721442886 6% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 281.0 20.2975951904 1384% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 49.4020404114 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 1418.0 106.682146367 1329% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 281.0 20.7667163134 1353% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 99.0 7.06120827912 1402% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 8.67935871743 12% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296253124027 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.296253124027 0.084324248473 351% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203844423432 0.151304729494 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125828701054 0.056905535591 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 142.9 13.0946893788 1091% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -213.74 50.2224549098 -426% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 7.44779559118 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 112.9 11.3001002004 999% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.49 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 20.78 8.58950901804 242% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 57.0 78.4519038076 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 55.0 9.78957915832 562% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 114.4 10.1190380762 1131% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 55.0 10.7795591182 510% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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