In many countries no longer feel the need to get married, some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

Essay topics: In many countries no longer feel the need to get married, some people believe that this is because women are able to earn their own income and therefore do not require the financial security that marriage can bring. To what extent do you agree?

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Nowadays, it seems to be a trend that is becoming more and more unmarried female human. While some people argue that independent finance is considered the main reason guiding the decision of being unmarried women, I completely disagree with this view
In my opinion, there are several reason why some women live without a spouse or partner. Firstly, they used to be a patient’s vulnerability – their own or their parents failed relationships. Hence, they are constantly afraid of negative reiterations and lack of belief on someone. Secondly, many female human have determined to remain single because of satisfied and happy with their unmarried status. They have a sense of independence include freedom, and control over one’s one life and finances. Example many women in Vietnam choose to become single mom rather than getting marriage
Whereas, I support perspectives that female human are able to earn money by their ability, it would be wrong, and almost impossible, to assert that financial security is one of the biggest reason lead to decide getting marriage or not. In fact, due to gender equality, normally women still seek a job and earn money since they have a husband or partner, even many female human have expected to become bread-winner in family. For example, some women in developed countries as America they are billionaire and independent finances however obviously they still got marriage
In conclusion, it is absurd to argue that the tendency of unmarried female human is considered as a consequence of independent finance.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 243, Rule ID: AFRAID_OF_HEIGHT[2]
Message: The noun should be probably in the plural form: 'reiterations'.
Suggestion: reiterations
... they are constantly afraid of negative reiteration and lack of belief on someone. Secondly...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, whereas, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1311.0 1615.20841683 81% => OK
No of words: 251.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22310756972 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98032404683 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8120548109 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.593625498008 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 434.7 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.6974304374 49.4020404114 175% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.666666667 106.682146367 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8888888889 20.7667163134 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.5555555556 7.06120827912 206% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.157526367407 0.244688304435 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595096037254 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533308775194 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0824517982362 0.151304729494 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567574895441 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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