In many countries people are concerned about the number of children who are
overweight.
What do you think are the causes of this?
What solutions can you suggest?
In this day and age, reaching a life full of material, property and education has not been a challenging mission to each person anymore. So, health issues have been the first priority all over the world, especially for children. Amongst them, being overweight has sparked much harsh debate from their parents about how to solve that issue and find out its causes for preventing it in the future. In this essay, the causes and solutions of this issue will be discussed thoroughly,
Firstly, admittedly, children of the present are actually compelled to pursue academic achievements more than developing their physical health. Obviously, that attitude can help children equip themselves with highly-specialized knowledge and critical skills for higher education in the future like Master and further PhD’s programs. On the other hand, they will firmly be faced with severe heath issues like being overweight. That issue arises from their parents’ unconsciousness of investing in their physical development like allowing them take part in sports clubs or outdoor activities with the purpose of enhancing their physical health.
Secondly, it must be mentioned that children those who are living in the industrialized society full of fast-food and artificially chemical beverage will be put in danger of having a less-nutritious lifestyle. In the long run, being exposed to a huge source of less natural and fatty food can create a host of redundant energy which, if being consumed in time, will be transformed into fatty substances in their body. What’s more, replacing fruit juice by gaseous drinks can also form a large amount of chemical sugar accumulated in children’s body that may contribute to their being overweight sooner or later.
From my own experience and understanding, I suggest that regardless of the stage in which children are, their parents should provide them fundamental information about maintaining a good health; encourage and support them in taking part in sports activities. In addition, establishing a naturally nutritious and physically and mentally healthy lifestyle also make a substantial contribution to avoiding being overweight in the process of their development over time.
To conclude, limiting the problem of children’s being overweight and further their properly physical development should be perceived deliberately for them to avoid health-related unexpected outcomes in the future. That can just be fulfilled if their parents actually pay attention and support them conscientiously.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ntion and support them conscientiously.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 24.0651302605 145% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2149.0 1615.20841683 133% => OK
No of words: 388.0 315.596192385 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.53865979381 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43821085614 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0750641461 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.592783505155 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 645.3 506.74238477 127% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.0572683078 49.4020404114 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.5 106.682146367 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7142857143 20.7667163134 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117898174134 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461918641283 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0327448370035 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0701159057881 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.027896422243 0.056905535591 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.5 13.0946893788 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.15 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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