In many families today both parents work Are there more advantages when a mother works than disadvantages

Essay topics:

In many families today, both parents work. Are there more advantages when a mother works than disadvantages?

Nowadays, in this modern world, people tend to work harder in order to make a living. Whether  mothers should go to work or not , though, is still a topic of debate. While this trend is bad in some respects, its benefits are more significant for the followers of this trend.

There is no denying that taking the children away from their mother can cause a lot of harm. First, most children can learn bad habits when they are not under the supervision of their parents. A good example of this is when they are alone, they can use smart phones or television all day or watch malicious contents without any inhibition. And it is much more dangerous when they continue to behave badly while their parents are not aware of their bad manners.

Despite all the aforemwntioned drawbacks, I would contend that if the mothers have a job, their family will not be suffer from financial burdern, and this is especially true in the case of poor families. When they have financial stability, they will able to fulfil all the needs of their children. Moreover, thanking to the parents’work, they can also save an enormous money for their child’s future.  Further, their children can learn how to live independently, including doing household chores, personal hygiene, cooking, and eating for themselves.

To summarize, while the benefits of mothers working make it appear to be a good idea, I believe that this trend is more beneficial than harmful by making children more freely or independently responsible.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, moreover, so, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 41.998997996 67% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1255.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 254.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94094488189 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99216450694 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71378782655 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.590551181102 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 376.2 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.2953454466 49.4020404114 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.583333333 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.7667163134 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.58333333333 7.06120827912 51% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184828819672 0.244688304435 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0721175806798 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533808602521 0.0667982634062 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124487640415 0.151304729494 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0397863962291 0.056905535591 70% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 50.2224549098 117% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.58950901804 99% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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