Many people believe that zoos have no purpose in today’s world and should be closed. What problems do zoos bring?
What are the alternatives to zoos if they are closed
A zoo is one of the most popular places that people go to learn about animals. Not only can you see lively animals up-close, but also you can learn about their natural habitat. However, I believe that zoos should be closed because there is a controversy about maintaining zoos for following reasons: how people in a zoo treat the animals is unethical, and maintaining zoos costs money.
First, I’d like to discuss that zoos should be closed because how people in a zoo treat the animals is not ethical. Although they try to create an environment that is best for each animal, they often fail to breed the animals in a naturalistic environment that resembles a wild life. Animals would have a hard time adjusting into the new environment they are brought to. Moreover, baby animals that are born in a zoo are likely to lose their innate ability to survive, such as competency for hunting or migrating. Therefore, zoos should not continue their business because it is highly unethical.
Second, I would argue that maintaining zoos cost money. Multiple researches show that it costs a significant amount in order to keep a zoo running throughout a year. That is because of the nature of breeding different kind of animals takes a lot of effort. The food has to be fresh and nutritious, and the environment they live in needs to mimic their natural habitat. Hygiene needs to be well taken care of, in order to combat any infectious diseases. Hence, I believe zoos should be closed because it is a mare financial burden for us.
As stated above, I believe zoos should not be maintained as it is unethical to take animals away from their natural habitat, and breed them in a cage, and we simply cannot afford to maintain zoos. Alternative to zoos can be a virtual reality, where you can experience realistic view of wild animals at home.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, well, as to, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1524.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7476635514 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6017515878 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.520249221184 0.561755894193 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 488.7 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2181370237 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.25 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0625 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 7.06120827912 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330699225111 0.244688304435 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121798568539 0.084324248473 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102670640227 0.0667982634062 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223592283208 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0470577872138 0.056905535591 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.0946893788 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.58950901804 91% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 78.4519038076 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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