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Many students find it difficult to concentrate or pay attention in school. What are the reasons? What could be done to solve this problem?

It is true that many students these days find it increasingly difficult to pay attention during lessons. Although this problem can be attributed by a whole host of reasons, some feasible solutions can be considered to address this.
There are two major reasons why pupils find it struggling to focus at school. The first one is natural predisposition. It can be explained by the fact that Students throughout history have always wanted to escape their school lessons. This is because learning is difficult and provides little pleasure itself relative to both passive and active pastimes like hanging out with friends, watching TV, listening to music, or playing sports. Another reason is that the advent of the ubiquitous internet era and portable devices such as smartphones has had an exponential effect on attention spans and diversionary priorities. Most students today are addicted to short videos and posts on social media networks and therefore struggle to follow the intricate arguments of lengthy lectures and extended readings.
To address the underlying causes, I would propose two solutions. The most immediate fix would be to ban phones. This is difficult since phones serve practical purposes such as allowing students to call their parents or book a ride home, but they could be taken at the beginning of the day and returned when school finishes. Another step schools could take would be to modernize the curriculum and account for reduced attention spans. Lessons could be shorter and could include more interactivity in order to stimulate learning, rather than the passive learning environment that has led to daydreaming students for generations.
In conclusion, although this trend is likely an irreversible part of human nature and progress, schools can implement changes to curb its effects. It is important for parents and governments to be supportive of such reforms as well.

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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1591.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.25082508251 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83584975066 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.630363036304 0.561755894193 112% => OK
syllable_count: 478.8 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2784347883 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.066666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2 20.7667163134 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.73333333333 7.06120827912 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2771405709 0.244688304435 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787476508364 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509767105232 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.15559435028 0.151304729494 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518288568333 0.056905535591 91% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.17 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.53 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 78.4519038076 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Essay evaluations by e-grader

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, therefore, well, in conclusion, such as, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments