In these days, more and more young people are more interested to know about international celebrities than famous local people in the history of their countries. Some reasons can be cited; however, with some solution this problem can be mitigated.
Nowadays young people are fan into international stars when they spend much time in front of TV and other the media such as DVD, the internet. Without any doubt, in most of the time foreign movies have more attraction, therefore these films and their stars will be common interest among the young. Moreover, history lessons in schools and universities are taught in old and boring ways that will be very boring for the new generation. In the result of neglect of education system in country about local history, young
people have limited knowledge about national champion in their country.
However, I believe this problem can be solved by taking some measures; firstly, I suggest that the government can reinforce the sense of patriotism among young people by making attractive films and animation about national heroes. This measure will attract the large number of young people, therefore they can know more about their history champion. Moreover, education methods should be upgraded as history lesson turn to the favorite lesson among students .For example, attractive games can be designed
as the main character are national champion to increase awareness of young people.
To conclude, to increase awareness and interest of young people about famous people in history of their countries changes in education system and moreover production of attractive history programs in the media will be essential.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, moreover, so, therefore, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1406.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 265.0 315.596192385 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30566037736 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.03470204552 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55731035282 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 176.041082164 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505660377358 0.561755894193 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 435.6 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 48.7217610519 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.6 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.5 20.7667163134 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.397493845791 0.244688304435 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.177592117534 0.084324248473 211% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153610829655 0.0667982634062 230% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.229088195127 0.151304729494 151% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114182937296 0.056905535591 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 13.0946893788 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.58950901804 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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