In the modern world, mobile and smartphone use has become universal in most parts of the world. Although there are clearly many advantages of this technology, there are many who believe it also brings many disadvantages. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.
As technological devices become more inseparable from modern life, people’s opinions differ as to their effects on individuals and societies. Some people believe that this trend have a lot of drawbacks by posing a health risk to the public, but I still believe that it can benefit people in certain extent.
On one hand, there are some undeniable adverse effects of the advancement of technology. One of the most reasonable explanations for this is that modern gadgets, including mobile phones, computers, and laptops are designed to have a user-friendly interface and have a great number of informative and entertainment applications, all of which are extremely addictive. As a result, according to reports from multiple countries have shown that there is irreversible damage to human brains from excessive screen-time usage. Also, excessive use of mobile phones can result in eye damage and a loss of concentration.
Despite the aforementioned drawbacks, I would argue that technology plays an important role in monitoring personal health. For example, people can easily track their daily sleep patterns, count calories, research treatment options, and even monitor their heart rate due to the technology combined in smart phones and watches. Furthermore, thanks to modern technology, 3D printers that replicate multidimensional models of problematic areas inside patients have been invented and applied. As a result, surgeons can handle the models and simulate a variety of possible operation replicas before performing the actual surgery. In addition to that, 3D printing can be used in reproducing bones or other organs in the human body.
In conclusion, while the technology advancements can effect people mentally and physically, it plays important roles in health care systems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so, still, while, as to, for example, in addition, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1543.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 261.0 315.596192385 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.91187739464 5.12529762239 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.70449544539 2.80592935109 132% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.63601532567 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.9 1.60771543086 118% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2957917391 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.583333333 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.75 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0892590728986 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0319813289318 0.084324248473 38% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0282097708291 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.053130367184 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253751319387 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.78 50.2224549098 49% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.0 12.4159519038 137% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.79 8.58950901804 126% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 78.4519038076 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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