More and More people want to own famous brands of cars, clothes, and
other items. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative trend?
In this day and age, people show their propensity for having their own different kinds of renowned brands such as cars, clothes and other items. There are some reasons to be attributable to this tendency. I am of the opinion that this is a negative trend.
On the one hand, There is a wide range of compelling reasons to explain why the increasing numbers of people have a desire to own well-known brands. Firstly, because it is likely to help them widen social networking sites with other people having the same level of social status. Therefore, it will facilitate easily for their business. For instance, Ly Nha Ky, she is not only one of the most famous stars in Viet Nam but also a successful businesswoman all over the world thanks to having their luxurious brands of clothes. She also has the chance to communicate and collaborate with the world’s leading stars.
Secondly, they might receive respect from other people in life through their wealth. Since when they own a high-end any type of item, to some extent it also expresses themselves to be the wealthy. Thus, others around them will have a admirable look instead of seeing them with a dirty look.
On the other hand, this trend will leave some tremendous effects on society and individuals. One evident strength is that if people do not have enough money to own a famous item, they have to borrow a large amount of money from others such as friends or neighborhoods. In fact, they also do not know how to take into consideration everything to be appropriate with their budgeting strategy. So, these make them go into debt and become a debtor. Besides, as they kept on pursuing the enthusiasm of having reputable brands, they will spend more time on building those items until they will feel they successful. As a result, they will gradually become isolated from their significant people like friends or family members. This is one of the negative things leading to weakening their relationship bonds.
In conclusion, Although I have to admit that there are lots of reasonable reasons to understand that why people long to own famous brands, I think that it is not a positive trend for people to pursue.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 380.0 315.596192385 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77894736842 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41515443553 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59382924236 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531578947368 0.561755894193 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 557.1 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.164628973 49.4020404114 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5789473684 106.682146367 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.31578947368 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.292751921998 0.244688304435 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856681897289 0.084324248473 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773920621613 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185255989147 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0955186346577 0.056905535591 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.54 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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