Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree?
There is a common belief that artists now are unable to earn a reasonable salary to afford their demands along with continue their work. As a result, it is often suggested that they should receive a basic income from the government with the aim of helping them pursue their career. While I believe that there are a large number of artists who are capable of making money easily, I still agree with the notion that the authority should provide them financial aid
To commence with, there has been a significant rise in the average earnings of artists in recent years thanks to the evolutionary development of technology. Artists now find it possible to market their art work on their own website on the Internet, which makes an enormous contribution to help their work receive global recognition and gain popularity easily. In addition to that, social network has given artists many chances to look for an online job. They can take advantage of their talents and also learn some other skills with the aim of applying to work for an online company. For example, those who are adept at drawing are likely to work as an illustrator, fashion designer or motion graphics artist.
Nevertheless, I also believe that artists should receive funding from the government. Despite the rapid development of modern art, some traditional genres of art tend to be neglected and less attractive to the public. As a consequence, these art works which bring the cultural identity of the nation have to face up to the risk of disappearing. Therefore, it is crucial for to the government to take the responsibility to supply artists funding with a view to stimulating them to develop traditional arts.
To sum up, much as many artists do not need to be provided financial aid, I still believe some of them ought to given the chance to receive funding from the authority.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, look, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, while, for example, in addition, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 24.0651302605 116% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1540.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.85804416404 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68310948637 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548895899054 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 506.74238477 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.2705829487 49.4020404114 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.333333333 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4166666667 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.33333333333 7.06120827912 132% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.375877084381 0.244688304435 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135599622728 0.084324248473 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0763040396728 0.0667982634062 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.221727868533 0.151304729494 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.072606169244 0.056905535591 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.0946893788 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 50.2224549098 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.4159519038 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.86 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.